THE PUNCH, chpt 1

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The Iowa Caucus is decadent and depraved.

 

All JD wanted was to finish building the porch onto his home.  All Lissa wanted was to a find a friend she could talk to and move on with her life.  They both thought that the right thing to do was move out to the middle of nowhere and start their little family over again.  Man, were they wrong.

 

VIABLE, a front row ticket to the surrealist nightmare of politicking today, follows the mental collapse of Lissa, a mother in mourning and doomed campaign volunteer as she abandons her obsessive hoarding of children’s clothes and faltering marriage long enough to become entangled in the rise of a third party.  This political insurgency, led by the haymaker throwing Senator Barbara Linn and her cross-dressing, tailgating vanguard the Barbarians, hopes to topple the power structure of both parties by manipulating not just what people hear or say, but what they do. 

 

This story bears witness to the meteoric rise, fall and redemption of a fringe political party as seen through the eyes of Marco, the campaign communications manager and metadata impresario; Cindy, the six foot tall transgender volunteer with testicular cancer; and the tragic couple, Lissa and JD, who stumble into the campaign and are bulldozed under the carnival wreckage left in its wake as they struggle with the loss of a child, their hometown and finally each other.

In a world where after every election people from one party or the other rend their garments and lament how such a thing could happen, this novel is a blue print.  It's the story of Middle America’s rage against fading cultural hegemony, a primer on the power of social media and a warning to those who say it could never happen here.

 

 

 

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don't need two words for that
Bit vague there -- what is "it," the disappearance or the coverage of it?
Just freakin' love that line. LEED certified porch - nice.
Was slightly alarmed when I read this -- I hope this isn't meant literally, as if there were a body buried where he plans to build the porch. But kidding aside, this is maybe a case of the old telling-not-showing.
I like that a lot. Though technically I'm not sure "Old Testament prophets" preached on the street. Well, I guess Jonah did.
Great scene! Really liked it.
Was Sopranos good?
Not particularly, it did have its moments, but it sure did piss people off with the way it ended.
I have a question for you as a writer, as an observation about writing in 1st person vs. 3rd, b/c the first chapter is 1st and the second 3rd. No judgement here is intended: Which do you feel more comfortable with, which voice seems to come most naturally? It's a question I've asked myself lately in my own work, and have been making comparisons.
The 1st person voice comes more naturally for me, it's more immediate and feels more conversational. But the choice of which voice to use was a very conscious one I made early on in the writing of the book. I wanted to be able to have the 1st person voice of Marco be that of the puppet master, the man who pulls the strings and knows more than he's telling. The 1st person voice is the guide in this book, I use it to explain or illuminate the things that are revealed in the sections written in 3rd person. The idea being that there are moments in the third person narrative of this story that are suspect/odd/questionable, but they aren't explored until sometimes a few chapters later when Marco in the first person says or reveals something that hopefully should have the reader going, aha! OK, now I get it, that's why he/she did X or Y. The real question for me, if you are so kind as to continue reading on, is does this switching back and forth from 1st to 3rd person work for you as as a reader.
I'll have to keep reading to see if the switch is working, after only two chapters it seemed a little abrupt. But...that said, maybe section titles would help alleviate that, I'm thinking of Danilo Kis' masterpiece Hourglass in which "Notes of a Madman" and "A Witness Interrogated" were written from the 1st POV, while "Criminal Investigation" and "Travel Scenes" are both written from 3rd POV. The four sections alternate sequentially throughout. I think the titles really help the gear shift; still, Kis is one of the most challenging authors I've read--both in style and subject matter--but once I got a feel I was completely absorbed.
Ryan, I'm not familiar with Danilo Kis. I'm definitely going to check him out, see what I can learn. Thanks.
When/if you read Kis, hit me up; I'd love to find out what you think...
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Oopsy.
Nice last graf!