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Soap and Water

Soap and Water
The story of civil war in a near-future American West, echoing our decade-long occupations of Iraq and Afghanistan.
For a limited time, download the complete ebook at http://www.joshuamalbin.com/soap-and-water. Audio chapters also available at the same link. Soap and Water tells the story of five Americans trying to find their way home through a broken country mired in a senseless occupation. Reporter Meg Anthony works from an embedded position at the front lines, endangering her life and those of the people around her. Her guide Wyatt Foley must choose between loyalty to a cause and his own future. Tough girl Veronica has never known a world without war and occupation. Smuggler 'Tit Jean wants to save his kidnapped son. Rebel leader Cutt hopes his fight against an illegal occupation can drown out his yearning for alcoholic oblivion. Their war, with its embedded reportage, occupied territory, violence and corruption, echoes the current ones in Iraq and Afghanistan. But it takes place in the mountain and desert United States of the near future, transformed by something like the Tea Party movement run amok. Splinter American governments of East and West have taken up arms against one another, riven by the same concerns that shape life in the West today. Individual liberty butts up against federal government. Religion and race set neighbors against one another. The scarcity of water threatens to undo civilization's tenuous encroachments against the desert. For generations, storytellers and leaders, warriors and con men alike have staked their claims in the archetypes and myths of the American West. Self-reliance and self-invention have long struggled against civilization and coexistence in our country’s literature, its politics and its culture. In Soap and Water that struggle has erupted with uncanny familiarity into a 21st-century American Civil War.

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I still have some way to go, but the story has been really exciting so far! It occurs to me that several of my close friends are going to love the strong female characters, like Meg and Veronica. Looking forward to having the whole thing in my hands so I can finish it in a cozy (i.e. still pre-apocalyptic) cafe.
When does the next chapter get posted?
This Sunday.
yay.
No, don't let the women reporters put aside their rivalry. It will ruin the intensity of their interaction! Great read.
Firstly, the world-building is phenomenal--the casual insertion of details makes it easy to forget that this America is somewhat different from the one around us. I am also impressed by how you portray the ambiguous effects of the war on each character. Presentation is also done very well; the slightly understated chapter 15 was a terrific idea. I'm concerned, though, that the characters don't see much development in the later chapters, especially after chapter 8. With shorter chapters and a switching point-of-view between each chapter, it feels like each person gets less screen time. I would love to see more of the characters; perhaps each main character can have the spotlight for a little longer, or maybe you can show more interaction between them (for example, I wish I saw more of Cutt and the trio interacting, and I'd hoped to see the conflict about Veronica stealing Meg's passport get developed further). It might not be absolutely essential to the plot, but it would definitely engage the reader with the characters more. I'd also note that although there seem to be five main characters, the development isn't evenly distributed: I know Meg the best and Cutt the least, while I feel most sympathetic for Tit Jean. Since they don't get an equal amount of attention, the scenes with the less significant characters tend to fade or become less interesting.
I totally hear you. It's a challenge to balance development of the multiple characters evenly. Can I ask you to check back in after a couple more chapters and let me know if you still feel like it's as much of a problem? The latest one I posted spends a long time with Tit Jean, and the next spends a lot of time with Cutt, two that have been relatively neglected up until now. Veronica still doesn't get her due until a little bit later, and I'll look to see if I can develop something for her earlier on without getting in the way of the forward momentum.
So.
I sent this to a friend of mine and we chatted about the beginning. She really liked the book, but she felt it starts a little slowly. Like, it take a few pages for the plot to really get going -- we're inside Meg's head as she reflects on her world, but we don't know anything about HER yet. I wonder if the plot could kick in more quickly (like on the first page), or we could somehow get a clearer idea of Meg herself (not just her abstract ruminations on her world). I mean, even a little action not involving Meg could entice readers into the novel a little more. A soldier doing something that embodied the observations you're describing. Showing, not telling. For example, what about an interaction between a soldier and a Posseman, or Meg and a Posseman? You could incorporate the observations you've already written, but they could be grounded by plot, by something actually happening. As it is, the first couple pages are perhaps the dryest pages. Or at least, that's what my friend and I were chatting about. Any second opinions?
Chris sent this comment to me privately and I asked him to post it here. I'm working on a revision of the first chapter that will address it, but in the meantime I'm curious what other people think.

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