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Book 1: 1968

 

Chapter 2: Topanga Beach

 

It’s a Batgirl kind of night, the sky purple, moon yellow. Even though it’s spring, 1968 is a year when every season feels like September. Wind rattles leaves high in the trees, and moonlight shines off the top of so many teenager heads. Kids clown around by the bonfire, driven to dance to records by the Wildcats and other surf groups whose drum fills last forever, and the ghostly reverb on the guitar drives the kicks. Their arms and legs co-mingle and fly akimbo as if they are trying to throw and kick their limbs away.

In the silence that falls when Denny changes the record, they can hear the ocean hiss, feel the sand that gets in between their toes, and get the creeps when three strange forms step out of the dark bank of trees.

It’s three girls. They step into the fire’s light, plain to see: Babysitter pretty, brown hair, sleepy eyes, pants that flare below the knee, no shoes. One has a denim purse with rhinestones forming the shape of a butterfly.

When the girls appear, it’s the boys without dance partners whose hearts flutter.

--Go talk to her.

--Which one?

--The one with long, straight hair.

--They all have long, straight hair.

--The one with bangs. The purse. Do it.

The one with long, straight hair, bangs, and purse couldn’t hear their hushed whispers over the new record playing but extends her hand to greet them. --Sadie, she says.

--Pleased, says the boy whose hand she shakes.

--Man, you freaks look like you stepped off another planet, says another of the boys.

Sadie pinches her nose and in a raspy nasal tone proclaims, --Take me to your leader! which draws the kind of laughter that helps them all relax.

--What brings you three lovely ladies out tonight?

--We heard the music, man. No need to get uptight.

--Yeah, we saw the fire and wanted to check it out.

--It’s a gorgeous night.

--Beats staying inside.

--You gals live up in the hills?

--We’re crashing at Dennis Wilson’s pad.

--Get out of town. Help me, Rhonda, yeah!

--Dennis is on tour with the Beach Boys. We’re just crashing at his pad.

--Would you like a soft drink?

--Do you have a beer? Sadie asks.

--Nope.

--What kind of scene is this? An L.A. beach party and not a freak in sight.

--Can I get you a bottle of Seven-Up?

--I just need a light, Sadie says.
 
The boy with the ho-daddy haircut flicks on a lighter and raises it to the filtered Pall Mall perched loosely between her lips.

--We’re on a creepy crawl, she says, blowing the smoke out of the side of her mouth away from the others.

The other two girls converge on Sadie, hushing her, which stokes the boys’ curiosity.
 
Without a word, Sadie opens her purse and pulls out a stack of credit cards held together with a rubber band. She fans through the cards in the fire’s light so everyone can see what they are, then drops them on the ground. She pulls a wad of foil out of her purse and unwraps it to reveal three hand-rolled marijuana cigarettes. She rolls them back in the foil and returns the package to her purse. She pulls out a long kitchen knife. She slashes at the air in front of her. She becomes vicious, her lower teeth jutting forward like an aggressive animal.

--Put that back! says one of her friends.

--You girls are far out! says the boy with the ho-daddy hair.

--Is this a stick up? asks another boy.

--I told you. It’s a crrrreeepy crawwwwl, Sadie says, putting the knife away. --We sneak inside the houses of rich pigs while they sleep, make ourselves peanut butter and jelly sandwiches, steal petty stuff, that kind of thing. Charlie likes knives, so I always bring him back a knife. We set their clocks back an hour, mess around their silverware drawer, put their spoons where their forks should be, pour bacon grease down the drain, flush a hand towel down the toilet.

--That takes some nerve.

--The part where it gets good is when we sneak around their bedrooms.

--How do have the stomach to do that?

--It's about creating the fear, man. Putting yourself in the fear brings on a higher awareness. You see everything like it really is.

--What do you do if they wake up?

--That's what the knife is for, Sadie says. Then after a long, squirmy silence, continues, --You take things too serious. You should see your faces right now. So tell me what this scene is about, all these kids and no beer.

--It's Jimmy's going away party, a boy says, gesturing his head to an unseen kid on the other side of the fire.

--Uncle Sam wants you, Jimmy! Sadie calls out.

--No, it's nothing like that. Jimmy’s a singer.

--I didn't know singers got draft deferments.

--Jimmy’s not drafted. He got a part with a musical act, Up With People, the Sing-Out Explosion. He's going with them on tour around the world for a year.

--Oh, God, they are so square. My great-aunt loves them, says the young woman standing beside Sadie.

--I didn’t catch your name? says the ho-daddy haircut.

--Lynette.

--I’m Brian.

--You can call her Squeaky, Sadie says. --We all do.

--Pleased to meetcha, Squeaky.

--Why do they call you Squeaky?

--It’s not polite to ask that in mixed company, Sadie says.

--We’re singers, too, Squeaky says.

--Are you in a group?

--We’re more like a family.

--Like the Beach Boys?

--Don’t I wish!

--Do you have a recording contract?

--That’s Charlie’s thing, Sadie says. He’s got a head for business. We’re going to be backup singers on Charlie’s album. We’re going to record it in North Hollywood at Universal Studios. Dennis Wilson set that up for us.

--Who’s Charlie?

--Charlie’s our savior, says Sadie.

--Sounds like a pretty swell guy.

--I said, he’s our savior. He’s my savior. You look surprised.

--The church where I go has a savior named Jesus Christ.

--Charlie is love, says Squeaky. --He changes you.

--Charles Manson is the second coming of Jesus Christ, says Sadie.

--Then why ain’t I ever heard of him?

--You will. Everyone will.

--Charlie is beautiful and gives out lots of love. In our family, we are always kissing, hugging, and making love. It’s what a family is supposed to be.

--Not in my book.

--Jimmy, get over here, Brian calls out to his compatriot on the other side of the bonfire. --Wait until you get a load of this.
 
Around the corner steps a curly blonde boy with piercing blue eyes.

--Jimmy, meet Sadie and Squeaky, and ...

--Katie.

--Pleased to meet you ladies.

--You’ll be happy to know that Sadie and Squeaky here, and Katie, know Jesus Christ personally.

Jimmy looks Sadie in the eye and takes one of her hands into his. With her other hand, she hides her cigarette behind her back. --Isn’t it a warm feeling that reaches down into the depths of your being, Jimmy says. --The feeling of knowing Christ. I’ve been trying to talk to this dingle-berry here, he says, pointing toward Brian with his thumb, --into going back to his faith for ages.

--Watch who you call a dingle-berry, dingle-berry.

Sadie pulls her hand away. --It’s not like that, man. You got it all wrong. I don’t dig your pig church.

Jimmy flinches, tears away his gaze, squints. Then he gets it: --I know all about kids like you. Running in the streets, protesting the war. I have news for you. It’s not the war you hate, oh, no. It’s patriotism. Long-hair kids like you hate America.

--Shit, man. You got it all wrong. I looove America. I love Russia, too, and Red China. I looooove the whole world. I don’t give a fuck about the war.

--I don’t appreciate your French.

--Can we talk about something else? Can we talk about music? He said you’re a singer?

With the scene calming down, Squeaky and Katie, as well as Brian and his friends slough away to other conversations around the fire, leaving Sadie and Jimmy alone to talk about music.

--Sure, I’m a singer. What do you sing?

--The songs Charlie writes. How ‘bout you?

--High tenor.

--I just sing high.

--I bet you do.

--Did you get a load of my knife?

--No.

She pulls it out of her purse again. --I don’t know why people make such a big deal of it. It’s an ordinary kitchen knife.

--It’s a strange item to carry around in your bag.

--If I was slicing tomatoes, no one would bat an eye.

--The beach isn’t exactly a kitchen, he says.

Sadie bursts into laughter, she can’t hold still, and her appearance turns strange in the twisting shadows thrown by the fire playing across her face.

Jimmy knows it should not be this way. He can’t explain it. He likes her.

--You know, you're something else when you laugh, he says.

--Really, you think so. No one's ever said that to me before.

A girl who had been standing several feet away pulls Jimmy aside and says to him in a harsh whisper, --No sooner do I turn my back and I see you talking to her with those big cow eyes.

--We're just talking!

--That's all you better do, Jimmy Sorensen!

He slips back to Sadie. --Now where was I?

--I was showing you my creepy crawl knife.

Sadie bows her legs and bounds around the fire, wielding the knife over her head and slashing the air like Tony Perkins with ants in his pants. Her dance draws hoots of laughter from the boys.

--How many times do I have to say this? Put that thing away, will ya? Squeaky calls to her from the other side of the fire.

Sadie sneaks back to Jimmy and shows him the knife. She strokes it up and down with her fingers. --Charlie's a knife freak. He taught me how to toss knives. I’ll show you. Go stand by that tree and light a cigarette.

--Sure, that sounds like fun. The only problem is I don't smoke.

Sadie again bursts into a fit of laughter, and this time, he joins her.
 
Their laughter dies down, and the mood shifts. She reaches into her purse and pulls out a pack of Pall Mall filters. Jimmy takes the pack, and removes two, placing them between his lips. He doesn't know how to smoke, and everything he knows about smoking, he learned from the movies. She cracks open a Zippo in a manner that shows she knows what she’s doing and lights them. He hands one back to her.

They search for something to say.

--Someone's out there in the woods, he says.

--You saw a man?

--Yes.

--A man without a face?

--I didn't see his face, but just because I didn't see his face doesn't mean he doesn't have a face.

--It’s Charlie.

--Charlie this, Charlie that. Charlie the Tuna.

In a sing-songy voice: --You don't want to call Charlie a tuna when Charlie's around.

--If he's a friend of yours, why doesn't he come down here?

--Charlie's like that, man. He's shy. Is he still there?

--I don’t see him.

--Then he’s gone.

--Can I tell you something private?

--Lay it on me.

--I don’t know what I’m getting myself into.

--It’s all right. I don’t bite.

--No, I mean with Up With People. There’s something strange going on.

--You’ll have fun. Not a lot of kicks but fun.

--Here, I’ll show you what I mean. Billy, get your rear end over here, he calls out to a chubby kid on crutches. --Billy, what did you think about the show last week at Fort Hood? Sadie, this is Billy. Billy’s got a part in Up With People, too. He broke his leg skiing, which will keep him off the stage for, how long?

--The next six weeks, Billy replies.

--Billy, what did you think of the show?

--It was spectacular! When you fellas broke into "We Are With You, Mr. Washington," it hit me like a bombshell. I was sitting there with tears in my eyes flowing from my eyes like two rivers. I just couldn't get over how terrific it was. I wanted to be up there on stage with you so much, this busted leg of mine better heal up quick.

--Thanks, Billy, now go get yourself a Seven-Up.

Billy hobbles away, leaving Sadie and Jimmy to talk in a hushed tone.

--Sounds like you really knocked them out, Sadie says.

--That’s just it, says Jimmy. --We were awful. We stank up the place. All those G.I.s, man, they hated us.

--I’m sure it wasn’t that bad.

--They were screaming obscenities, throwing things. I smiled through it. Everyone did. The whole show, all I could think about was how I wanted to quit.

--Then quit then.

--The thing is, I picked up the newspaper the next morning on our way out of town, and there was a review of the show, saying how the G.I.s gave us five standing ovations. It didn’t bug anyone else, how the paper got it so wrong. It’s like if the newspaper says that the audience loved us, then that makes it true. Somebody out there wants us to look good. I don’t know who or why.

--You should be more like me. I get down with people.

--I don’t get you freaks and all your peace and love mumbo-jumbo.

--Shit, man, peace and love are over, in case you hadn’t noticed. Our family has moved past peace and love.

--What do you believe in then?

--We believe in what Charlie teaches. Charlie says there is no good. There is no evil. Kill is a thing, and you can’t kill kill. If you’re willing to be killed, you should be willing to kill.

--That last part sounds like my old man. He fought in the Pacific.

--Charlie says it’s the pigs turn to go up the cross.

--Now there’s something my old man would never say.

--We’re not so different. I used to go to church, but it’s not like I ever felt God, or whatever, not like I feel the fear. With Charlie, it’s life or death, man. Charlie makes it that way.

--You look like someone good at keeping secrets.

--I don’t know about that.

--Please don’t tell anyone. When I’m praying, I know I’m supposed to feel the spirit of Christ our savior flowing through me, but I don’t feel a damn thing. So I do catch your drift. I do feel it when I’m singing, and I’m not supposed to say this, but I feel it when I hear the Rolling Stones. Their music makes me want to sing and dance. God, Mick Jagger is just what I imagine Christ would be if he lived today. You’re the only person I can tell that. The only way I can ever hear the Rolling Stones is in my bedroom with the sound turned down.

--Then why don’t you ditch Up With Pigs and join the Rolling Stones?

--I don’t have that look. My parents would kill me if I grew my hair out.

--Charlie digs the Beatles. They send messages to each other in their songs.

--Charlie doesn’t sound half bad.

--You know, if it doesn’t work out for you in Up Yours, you could always come sing with us, you know, be part of Charlie’s family.

--Sorry, nailing pigs to the cross ain’t my scene.

--There are pretty girls. It’s like two girls for every boy, but we have even more than that. Everyone gets off on each other. Everyone gets loaded.

--No, thanks, that’s not for me.

--If you really can sing, Charlie might even give you the best parts.

--I can sing anywhere I go. I could sing to the ocean and moon all night, if I wanted.

--You would change your mind if you could see Charlie dance.

--What’s so special about that?

--He dances like he’s on fire. You can’t take your eyes off of him.

--It doesn’t sound like anything I want to see.

--Charlie has a way with animals. He can zap a snake with his stare.

--I can zap them with my .38.

--Charlie will zap you with his .38.

--All the more reason for me to stay put. Hey, do you wanna dance?

--I thought you’d never ask.

He puts his hand in the small of her back. She reaches behind her and takes it. They make their way past the others toward the patch of beach where the kids are dancing. They face each other and begin to move in time with the music. She performs a watusi, her arms reaching up and down in the air vigorously. He tries out the James Brown moves he learned from the T.A.M.I Show, his feet moving so fast they turn invisible and never touch the ground.

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Very easy to imagine this night. Great descriptions!
I really love this image...I recall a few nights like that!
I think you can end this at "away". You've already got the kicks at the end of the previous sentence. And it gives a gentle hint of resenting the limits of, well, everything; teenage-hood, parents, draft, corporeality itself.
Perfect, I've been trying to think of a way to fix that line, and I think that works!
TOTALLY love this piece! on second read, consider re-working this sentence. overall, love the beach boys placement here, playing on their dark side... the mental troubles and excessive drug use. the maturation from innocence from early light-hearted Bboys paralleling the way these beautiful young girls morphed into homicidal cult followers with kitchen utensils at the ready. this time period being so much about a Fall From Innocence...
Tammy, thank you for reading! I will take a close look at this sentence and fix the ho daddy haircut kid in the next set of edits. Thank you again!
I like the setting of Topanga/Malibu Beach in 1968. The surf scene there was a little less benign, especially with figures like Mickey "Da Cat" Dora and others on the scene. The surfers would be diving headfirst through glass coffee tables, and there'd be lots of sex going on here and there. These seems like the "Valley" kids, the "kooks and hodads" of the day. Could be called "Topanga Canyon," unless "Beach" is a mythical allusion to the famed Malibu.
Thank you, your comment gives me a sense of how to make a few changes. That's kinda the expectation I was going for, setting this up to be a scene fueled by wild surfer testosterone, but then my tendency (and sense of humor) is to instead provide a milquetoast crew straight out of church camp. The Manson Family and Up With People are about as warped and off-the-beaten track as it gets in rock 'n' roll, so when I'm writing a rock novel, that's straight where my head goes. I've never been to Topanga but was under the impression there was a small beach there less crowded than Malibu?
good strategy, I like it better with the "silent majority" kids rather than the raucous surf crew. Your choice enhances the humor, and I'm sure, future mayhem to ensue in the work. Yes, there is a Topanga State Beach, probably where the kooks hang out, perfect!
this is a very neat & tasty opening. my only critique of the thing as a whole is a line or 2, or a word there & here is extraneous. example: opening paragraph, last sentence, i'd suggest dropping the "rock steady"... their moving to the beat is description enow. What i do esp. like abt the piece is that you really do capture the zeitgeist, & capture both the manson family & the up with people. i have a few old friends, who in their youths had brushes with each camp, & you absofuckinglutely nailed it. i hope you do something with this, whether integrating it into yr novel or just tweaking it as a short story. as for the dialogue, i thought it was pretty clean, in terms of being able to follow the characters. i only got confused once as to who sd wot, but it did not throw me out of the narrative, i kept reading. i went back & sorted it. i should have hi-lited it. It's in the intleraction with the kid on crutches. & as for the topanga topography, it works. (i used to spelunk in a couple of small caves above topanga beach (one which had an opening out of the cliff & onto the pacific ocean, everything from topanga down to palos verdes & out to the channel islands on clear nights), so you convinced me — i cld easily buy into manson & family lurking just off the relatively small patch of beach.
Hey RV, thanks so much for taking the time to read this. I'm thrilled that it jibes with what you know of both sides. I am always battling against extraneous words. Whenever I think I've cut them all out, I find more. I will also work on getting the attribution a little more clear. Thanks again!
rumble?
Really like this piece, Richard. Your descriptions are dead on - one simple word and we get it - "Babysitter pretty" and butterfly rhinestones - love it.. it's an interesting angle on this story - getting a glimpse of these girls at the start of the cult, into their language, actions, etc. all nicely done
Shelagh, I'm so glad you caught the 'babysitter pretty' line. When I was a kid in the early 70s, I was pretty terrified of Charlie Manson, and it seemed like every time I had a babysitter, she looked like one of the Manson girls. Voila, this line. Thank you so much for reading!
the humor elevates the menacing mood of the chapter. i think somebody said that the beach boys were too square, but in fact dennis wilson hung out with charles manson. have you read zachary lazar's "sway"? it's a fictionalized account of the rolling stones and charles manson.
Richard, thank you for mentioning the humor. That's always what makes me most nervous, that readers won't find the humor. I'm going to check out that book. While the Beatles and Beach Boys had their connections to Manson, it really was the Stones who gave off a creepy vibe during the Altamont era, which is absolutely fascinating to me.
I like this
This is a cool shift, we get the feeling here the girls are more experienced than the boys, and in one simple exchange of dialogue provides insight into the dynamic between the two groups.
hey richard - loving this. great mood. pesky note here to clarify this, to set the style for those of us not familiar (like: "ho-daddy haircut, bangs in his eyes, flicks..." or whatever it looks like)...
I bet he does. This is creepy.
I like this, squares meet the Manson girls, excuse my previous comment!
I love the specificity of the pranks!
This is my favorite line from this chapter. I think there are places that can strive for this kind of cut. For example: "like an aggressive animal" could be more specific...
I was immeditaley drawn to this as an idea because I think a lot of people can relate to looking at Susan Atkins as a sexual being, whether you're a child of the sixties or a Gen Y kid who just picked Helter Skelter off your parents book shelf...She looked so beautiful in those pictures, harmless and yet you knew she was dangerous... Anyway, I'm in.
Hey, Jon, thanks for picking up on that. During the trial, Susan Atkins came off as someone not only capable of horrific violence but also completely unremorseful. I think people who followed the Manson story really wanted something more from her and she never gave it to them. In this piece, all I wanted was to show a Susan Atkins who capable of melting when someone pays her a compliment.
Though I like "curly blonde boy" I'm not sure you need this sentence. What the others already described and his dialogue give us an image of Jimmy.
Lewis, that's great feedback. I jump at every opportunity to remove lines that don't add to the voice or mood. Much appreciated!
This sounds like a stage direction. End the first sentence at "fire" and then a bit of business so Jimmy can answer the question. Sadie looks at him in a certain way, fr example. (That's just the way this para struck me. Sorry if I got it wrong.) (And I'm interested in the subject. Mi eposo was around the locale around that time & mentions it to me when we compare our cultural differences.)
Like the mix of youthful self confidence and insecurity. Great dialogue that describes the characters well.
I really like the build up, the anticipation of this Charlie character, it's always tricky to develop a "off-screen" character, and you're doing it well.
Fort Hood is in Texas, what about Camp Pendleton, or 29 Palms?
a little editorial-like? Should it be more subtle?
I like the institutional version of Charlie Manson as a bookend to the immediate threat. This could be a terrific book!
do you mean who or why?
I do, and I am fixing that. Thanks for the catch!
Really enjoyed this opening chapter, and can't wait to read more. I think it has a good flow, and that first sentence is incredible, really sets the mood and the lighting on the scene.
Thanks, Henry, you really made my day!
Chilling!
There's an interesting moment here where Jimmy divulges of something incredibly personal to a stranger. I sense an attraction that's been going on that makes this stand-offish-ness to her freak way of life work, but I feel like this moment is still sort of sudden, perhaps there can be a couple of more physical actions, flirtations to build this kind of quick trust. Just an idea to make this really land because it's a nice moment.
you're missing a "you" in this sentence. How do you have the stomach to do that? This is great so far I will read on.
The looming danger is really compelling. A person has to keep reading to see what happens.
Melissa, thanks so much for your positivity, comments and catches! (For whatever reason, the system isn't letting me reply to your comments directly.)
This is just a thought but I would think that the Beach Boys were kind of square for this bunch. I mean she has weed and Charles Manson and stuff. I was a little young but I think this might be more of a Jimi Hendrix, Janis Joplin, Mamas and Pappas, Zepplin bunch..
Maybe it's just me but I would change this word here... "her appearance turns strange" maybe she looked strange I'm not sure "appearance" sounds too formal for me
I smiled through it. missing an r small typo
his feet moving so fast they turn invisible and never touch the ground. the first and last sentences of this piece are stunning.
I like this chapter very much, and look forward to reading more. This will be a great novel, the confrontation of youth cultures in the 60s, and doubts within them. John Waters would like this!
You only need to mention James Brown and I think what that dance looks like. :) Nice ending, good tension and story, great dialogue. The balance between chilling foreshadowing and sympathy for the characters is great and memorable.
When I saw James Brown on the T.A.M.I. show, he just seemed superhuman. Thank you so much for reading and your kind words!
Nice work, Richard. The only thing that bothered me at all was that long stretch of only-dialogue there in the last quarter. I kept wanting some brief interruption, some small narrative anchor. But that's probably just a personal preference more than anything else. Anyway, I look forward to reading the next chapter! (I get a bad feeling about this "Charlie" fellow, whomever he is... ;)
Thanks so much for reading the chapter, Ben! Admittedly, long stretches of dialogue have become my style, though in early chapters, I am working on breaking them up as much as possible so that they seem more natural later, so indeed, I will be focusing on that in the next rewrite. That's an excellent icon you have, by the way. RM
Thanks for the kind words, Richard. As to the icon...I'm also a musician (cover of my fourth album, Edible Darling.)
Like I said, I'm in, I hope to see more of this. It's got a ll the makings of a good book.